You actually had an interesting thesis, but there just isn’t much here to evaluate in terms of execution. The essay seemed rushed (as evidenced by many typos and grammatical mistakes) and there is essentially no evidence whatsoever. Several of these claims are VERY compelling and interesting, you just need far more evidence in your body paragraphs. The essay is also well short of the page requirement.- what the professor told me

Could you please rewrite 3-4 pages and follow the professor’s feedback which is a yellow line.